Response to 1st Draft Feedback

After handing in our first draft on the 22nd November, which had been completed the day before. We received both a grade and constructive feedback to improve the grade. In which we received a C+ grade as well as some comments on how the shots with lens flares off the river Thames were highly effective. However, we also got a piece of constructive criticism stating that we needed something else running throughout the video, for example a storyline which keeps being jumped back to. Due to our video becoming very repetitive with the artist standing with a guitar in his hands.

Therefore, in response to this feedback, I believe that we should get a female performer, and create a storyline around the Artist losing the girl, and wanting her to "come home". This storyline may be around 1-1:30 minutes long and it is played periodically thorough the music video, and the spaces around the story are filled with our favourite shots of the current draft.